Monday, January 22, 2007
Dread/Fear Paragraph
I woke up and the morning was gray it wasn't as crazy as normal. It was quiet, and mysterious. I was kinda confused then again I had looked and the time that was stirring me straight in the face with the numbers bloody red. The time was 6:40. I leaped out of bed and had to make sure that everyone else was awake like a rooster in the early morning. To find out everyone was asleep; so i rapidly woke everyone up and jumped up a scurried to get ready. Once everyone was up and ready to go leave everyone ran so fast like a roadrunner and jumped like a kangaroo into the car and hurry and drove off. First we had to take a journey to a specialer middle school that was down a hill but not around the corner. Then we had to drive backwards to another school with little rats running around trying to get some breakfast. Then we were finally off on the long freeway that seems like we were driving to another country. But sooner then I knew it I was at a place that I see almost all week. I see this place five times a week and I don't have to see it for two days of that week. It was my school, where there are random, fun, and interesting people. Yet I know that I want to go home i can't but I know that the day is going to be the same.
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4 comments:
I love the way you described the many events of that morning. I also like the way you talk about the many interesting people at your school. That was a positive portion. I mean even though you may dread some things there's always going to be a positive portion to everything.
Yeah, that is pretty descriptive. I like how you used this similie: Once everyone was up and ready to go leave everyone ran so fast like a roadrunner and jumped like a kangaroo into the car and hurry and drove off.
That must have been really fast.
Brittany,
You are a good writer!
I like how you used the following words in context:
- "bloody red"
- Mysterious
- Scurried
These words were very descriptive. For some reason, your story reminds me of a cartoon family, thats about to go on vacation, running around everywhere, in a big hurry. Although this may not have been the picture you were trying to put in my head, it was very descriptive and I enjoyed reading it.
nice work :]
-Kate
Brittany that was ballen i really liked the way you described the middle school kids as rats running around to get there breakfast(that was funny)
$KIKI MACKIN$
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